你校英語報開展主題為“My Winter Vacation”征文活動，請你寫一篇短文投稿，談?wù)勀愕暮偕睢?br />
內(nèi)容要點如下：
勤于鍛煉，健康飲食；
家庭聚會，做美味的食物慶祝新年；
制定新年計劃，為新學期做準備；
補充一到兩點有關(guān)信息或想法。
注意：
詞數(shù)60－80。
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注意時態(tài)。
My Winter Vacation
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孫紫妍
All the students love vacations. I had an enjoyable winter holiday last year. Let me talk about it.
At the beginning of the vacation, I finished doing my homework. Then, I planned to play sports. At the same time, I made up my mind to form a healthy eating habit, because I knew it was good for my physical health. Before the New Year’s Day, I often went out with my friends. When the new year was coming, we had a family party and made something delicious, such as chicken and fish. My parents gave me some money—the lucky money. My mom said it meant good luck. After that, I started to make my New Year’s resolution. I remember the most important one is that I should read more books and study harder. If I study harder, I will get better grades. And I made something else to prepare for the final exam.
What a meaningful winter vacation I had! Can you tell me what you did during the vacation?
教師評語：After reading your article, I totally agree that you have experienced un unforgettable winter vacation. In your article, the readers can easily grasp what you did, because you describe your vacation from the beginning (finish doing your homework) to the end (make the resolution) logically. However, you can do better if you can use more complex sentences and conjunctions properly.
黃熙然
A new spring is coming and a new term is coming. During the winter vacation, I did a lot of interesting things. Now, let me tell you.
First, body is the most important. To keep healthy, I exercised more often. I did sports four times a week. They made me much stronger. Also, I ate healthier food. I ate more vegetables and fruit. They were very healthy.
Second, I had a family party with my family members, we made delicious food together to celebrate the new year.We really had a good time.
Third, I made some resolutions for the new year. For the new year, I will take part in more competitions, make more good friends and help out with the housework.
Last, to improve myself, I read a lot of books to improve my writing skills. I also made some preparations for the school work. I’ll try my best to be a better person.
I think I really had a wonderful winter vacation.
教師評語：Clear thinking and progressive explanation. The content ranges from body to learning, from learning to activity, and ends with echo.
章旋
My winter vacation was busy but happy. Do you want to know it? Let me tell you something about my winter vacation.
First, I ate healthy food every day. Because I wanted to be thinner and more beautiful. During the winter vacation, I hardly ever ate junk food. To keep healthy, I also did exercise three times a week, such as playing basketball, playing football and running.
Second, I had a family party. We cooked delicious food to celebrate New Year’s Day, and I got lots of lucky money.
Third, I made a New Year’s resolution. It was mainly about how to improve my grades and prepare for study. Because I will have a test when I go to school.
I think winter vacation is a good time to have a rest, but we can’t play all the time. We must study for 3 hours a day. It can make us better and better.
What about your winter vacation? Did you play or study?
教師評語：Zhang Xuan’s passage has a clear structure. The beginning of the passage sets suspense to attract interest in reading. Excellent!
周紫研
During my winter vacation,I did a lot of things I like.Let me tell you about my winter vacation.
Doing exercise is very important for us .So I kept doing sports every day. Although the weather was cold,I still ran in the morning during the vacation.Eating healthily is also important .I hardly ever ate junk food and I drank a glass of milk every day.During the Spring Festival,my parents and I made some delicious food to celebrate the new year.We also displayed the “fu” upside down on the front door of our house.And I made a resolution to get better grades next term.
This is my winter vacation.It was meaningful and educational .What about yours?
教師評語：Keep to the main idea, express clearly and use words well.
何子琪
The winter vacation is coming. Let me tell you about my winter vacation.
In this winter vacation, I took up doing exercise every day and had healthy food. They are good for my health. And I went to have a family party. I cooked delicious food with my family to celebrate the New Year. Then I have already made a resolution about this year. It is a way to prepare for the new term. At the beginning of the year, I always see a movie. Because there were many new and interesting movies coming out.
All in all, I had an excellent holiday. Can you share us about your winter vacation?
教師評語：Winter vacation is a happy holiday for you. In your composition, you use a variety of phases and sentence patterns. Keep moving!、
甘駿奇
My winter vacation was wonderful. I did many interesting things during the vacation. Now please allow me to share them with you.
First of all, I usually did sports and ate healthy food to improve my physical health, I think being healthy is the most important thing. What’s more, I had a family party, we made some delicious food together to celebrate the Chinese lunar new year. We cooked dishes like dumplings, noodles, roast chicken and so on. Moreover, I made some new year’s resolutions to prepare for the new term. I plan to study harder and take up some new hobbies. I hope I can get better in the new term. At last, I visited my uncle and I played some games with my cousin. All of us had a great time.
I think my winter vacation was meaningful. What about you? How was your winter vacation?
教師評語：You talked about the different activities you did in the winter vacation. So the article is interesting to read. I think you did a good job in using the logic words in your composition and I hope you can make more progress in English study in the future.
陳子萌
The winter vacation is going to the end and I did a lot of interesting things during the winter vacation. Allow me to share some with you.
I did exercise such as playing basketball, running every day. It made me stay active during the winter. And I also had healthy eating habits. So I really had a healthy winter vacation. And during Chinese New Year, I displayed “fu” upside down on the front door of my house to wish good luck comes to my family. Everyone likes good luck and wants to have good luck. We also have the family party. All of us sit together around the table and had a big meal. We use the nice food to celebrate the coming year.
I made New Year\'s resolutions and planned for the new term. I wanted to get wonderful grades at the beginning of the year, so I had to study hard. My winter vacation was nice so I really enjoyed myself during it.
教師評語：As the year progresses, you are showing great improvements and capable of producing better work. All you must do is to concentrate harder and realize your resolution on schoolwork.
王熙景
Hi, I’m Linda. I had a good time in my winter vacation. Let me tell you something about my winter vacation.
I did morning exercise every day. I also ran with my brother in the park. Although it was very cold outside. One day, I got up just like usual, but when I turned on the window, I was very surprised. It was snowy outside. I woke up my mother and she was also happy to see it. So I played the piano because of the first snow in my city. Time went quickly, it was the first day in this year, so my mother cooked much food to celebrate that day. We were happy. After dinner, I decided to make New Year’s resolutions. I planned to improve myself and get ready for my new schoolwork.
This was my winter vacation. Although it was short, I still learned a lot. I hope everyone can be happy in the new year.
教師評語：A great sense of happiness can be seen in the article that shows you are a thoughtful writer. Expect better performance in developing a passage.
魏茹萱
During my winter vacation at home, I felt happy and relaxed. Let me tell you what I did.
I want to stay healthy so I made an exercise plan for the vacation. I kept running outside although the cold weather made me only want to stay at home. To keep healthy, a good eating habit is also important. I ate apples every day. As an old saying goes, “An apple a day, keep the doctor away.” Apples are really good for me.
New Year’s Day is always a happy time for my family. Family members got together and celebrated it with a big family meal. This year, my mother taught me how to cook fish——the main dish of the family meal. It means good luck will come.
What’s more, I made New Year’s resolutions for the new year. And I studied hard for the new term. In my free time, I read a book called “Harry Potter”. It’s interesting and relaxing for me.
I had a fantastic experience during my winter vacation. How happy I was!
教師評語：The structure is complete in your writing, and the content is rich. What’s more, your handwriting is excellent.
張思遠
My winter vacation is extremely fantastic this year.It is reasonably interesting for me.
I was keen on exercising this winter vacation.It made me dynamic.I also improved my eating habits because it is obvious that balanced diet is good for adolescents,so we all buried ourselves in cooking healthy and delicious food when we had the family party.And we celebrated new year together.After the Spring Festival,I made my new year’s resolution.I will struggle for the new term.I will show greater courage and determination in the face of difficult problems.During the vacation,I also went to the movies with my friends.The films shown in the Spring Festival were all incredibly amazing.
I am sure that I was happy this winter vacation.I felt fairly full and satisfied.
教師評語：The extent of your vocabulary adds much sparkle in your composition.There’s no doubt that you have been making great efforts in daily accumulation.I believe your writing will reach a higher level if you devote your more attention to the context of use.
倪銘檜
I had an enjoyable winter vacation. I did something important during it. Let me share you some of them.
First, I kept the habit of doing sports every day, I think it can make me have a healthy body. Also, I ate plenty of Chinese traditional food, such as dumplings, sweet soup balls and so on.And then, we had a family party. My family prepared all kinds of delicious dishes to celebrate the new year together. Next, we made new year’s resolutions. I looked forward to getting more improvement in the coming new term.
In a word, my vacation was busy and interesting. I had a really good time in winter vacation.
教師評語：The article is of explicit structure,but it is better to describe your winter vacation in more details.Besides,more flexible expressions and sentence patterns are expected in the future writing exercises.Try to accumulate more.Come on!
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